Jada+Felder

I Live In The Community Wilkinsburg. I Mean I love My Hood, But This Is A Crazy Neighborhood I Live In. When I Walk To School I Be Scared Because There Are People Rapping People And People Shooting And Killing People. I Worry That When I Walk To School Something Is Gonna Happen To Me.

A Carnival, Soggy French Fries , And a A New Pair Of Jeans. On A Boring Day, With Nothing To Do. Two Sisters Becky And Jamie Was Sitting In The House On The Couch Clicking Through The Channels On The Tv, Trying To Find Something To Watch. Becky Scream Out '' There Is Nothing To Watch Or Nothing To Do ! This Day Is So Boring. '' Mom And Dad Needs To Hurry Back Home So When Can All Do Something Together. They Where Out Because Today Was There 25th Anniversary And They Where Spending The Whole Day Together. Becky Said '' I Whanna Do Something But There Is Nothing To Do. Everybody Is Probably In The House Bored Too. Well Lets Call Some Of Are Friends And See If They Whanna Do Something Together Jamie Said. So Jamie Got Up And Went Over To The Phone And Started Dialing Peoples Numbers. She Called Her Friend Sarah From School. Sarah Picked Up The Phone, Jamie Said Hey Girl Its Jamie. I Just Wanted To See What You Was Doing And If You Wanted To Hang Or Something. Sarah Said That She Couldnt, She Was Babysitting Her Little Baby Brother Cause Her Mom Had To Take A Double Shift Today. She Said Oh Okay, Call You Tomarrow And Hung Up. She Tryed More People And They Where All Busy To. So Jamie Went To The Kitchen And Her Sister Followed Right Behind Her. Becky Heard On Tv About The New Carnival In Town And Told Her Sister. Becky Was So Hapyy And Hyper And Excited About Thre Carnival. Jamie Was Too. So They Ran Upstairs And Was Getting Ready To Go. Jamie Said Im Going To Wear My New Pink Shorts Mom Got Her Yesterday And And White Shirt. Becky Said She Was Gonna Wear Her Baby Blue Dress She Got At The Mall Acouple Days Ago. They Hurried And Ran Downstairs. Wrote A Note For Mom And Dad Saying Their Going To The Carnival And Ran Out The Door. They Where At The Bus Stop Waiting On The Bus. 15 Minuets Later The Bus Came. They Got On The Bus And Off They Went. There Was Alot Of Old Peolple On The Bus. Becky Said Quietly To Her Sister It Stinks On This Bus. Jamie To Her Sister To Shut Up And Just Deal With It. As They Where Stopping At Bus Stops. More And More People Was Getting On The Bus And The Bus Was Getting Crowded. Becky Was Getting Hot And Mad, But When She Looked Out The WIndow They Where There. She Jump Up, Pushed Through The People And Ran To The Paying Booth. Jamie Was Right Behind Her. The Man At The Booth Had A Big Smile On Him And Said Welcome To The New Carnival. How Many Tickets Do You Need ? Just Two Jamie Said. He Ripped Off Two Tickets And Gave Her The Tickets. With A Big Smile Her Said Enjoy Your Day Today And The Two Ran Off. They Where So Excited They Didnt Know What Ride To Get On First. But Before They Could Even Get On Anything Becky Was Whining She Was Hungry. Sarah Said Are You Serious, We Just Got Here. But Im So Hungry From The Bus Ride Becky Said. So Sarah Mad She Stomped Off And They Went To Go Get Some Food. They Saw A French Fries And Pizza Placed And Went Over There. There Was Like Four People Before Them. Becky Saw This Little Boy Eating Some Cheese Fries. He Was So Messy With Eating. He Had Fries All On The Floor And Over His Shirt, Just Everywhere.

Jada- I think this is a really good start. You think like a poet and I think your poetry could be great. Keep working, thinking, and writing. Free Style Friday. can't sleep at night, gun sounds in my head. why i gotta go through this, i want peace instead. everyday i wake up feeling scared cause i dont know whats gonna happen

Jada- Great Job! This is creative and descriptive. You are a good writer and I am glad you are in this class. - Boll

My First Rollercoaster Ride !

The first time i ever rode on a rollercoaster was scary, but then at the end it was fun. this all began is the summer of 2007. me and my sister and my mom went to kennywood park. when i walked into the park i heard alot of screams and people laughing. i seen alot of kids running around the park. my sister wanted to hurry and go with her friends. but my mom wanted to take a few pictures of us. so after about 8 pictures we took, my sister ask can she go now and mom said go head , but she gotta meet with us at 5:30 and the potatoe patch. she said okay and took off. mom looked at me and said we is gonna have alot of fun. we went to go play some games. my favorite game was the fishing game. it felt like i was realing fishing. i won and big stuffed animal too ! so after we played a few games my mom asked me did i want to go on some rides. i looked at her with a big smile and said yes. i grabbed her by her hand and ran towards the exterminator. that is my moms favorite ride. as we was standing in the line, i heard to boys talking about the ride called the phantom revenge. they where talking about how the ride was so fun and how it went so fast. it sounded fun, but scary because of how fast they where talking about. we finnally got to the ride. the ride was so fun, but kinda scary because we was in the dark and im scared of the dark. but mommy holded my hand so i was fine. we ride and all these fast turns and we was spinning like crazy. after we got off the ride, i told mom that i wanted to go and ride the phantom revenge. she just looked at me for a minuet and then ask me where did this come from. i told her i heard them to boys talking about it and i wanted to ride it. i was thinking that wheen schools starts i can tell my friends i got on that ride. i know none of my friends rode that ride yet and i would be the first one. my mom said alright if that is what i want. so we walked over to the ride. we had to wait in that line for lyke 20 mins. we got up to the seats and my stomach started feeling butterflys in it. my mom asked me am i okay and i looked at her and gave her a big fake smile and said yes. so when got in the ride and buckled are seatbealts. the people was talking and then i felt the tracks moving slowly up the tracks. i felt like i wanted to cry. when my mom saw me, she grabbed my hand and looked at me and smiled , i looked at her sad. she knew i didnt whanna do this, but i couldnt get off now. we reached the top. i thought we was gonna drop straight down, so i closed my eyes. then we slantly turned and went down. i coulnt even open my eyes to see. my head felt like somebody was pushing down on it. but the worst part about it was the fat boy infront of us forted. it smelled so bad. then the ride was over. i hurried up so i could get away from the smell. when we left the ride my mom hugged me and told me she was proud. after that we ment up with my sister and got something to eat. this was the best day at kennywood ever !

First Person Point Of View !

Yesterday i was sitting at home, when my friend called me. he asked me did i whanna go grab a bit to eat. so i said yeah and hung up the phone, grabbed my coat and went out the front door. we met at mcdonalds and got a burger, fries and a soda. we went to are seats and started eating. my friend was talking about how bored he is and how he wanted to do something extreme. then he was looking around outside and he saw this man pull up into a parking space, got out and left. he then looked at me and said '' yo man, dude forgot to lock his door " . then i said okay so . he said whanna go for a ride . i said man you know we can go to jail if we get caught . no thanks im okay . he said we aint gonna get caught , the cops will not catch us . he then got up tthrew is stuff away and headded out the door . as i watched him through the window he slowly walked towards the car . he then

What Makes Me Who I Am.

what makes me who i am. well the way i act makes me who i am. my personality makes me who i am. i come from a stranger black family. who worked hard in life to get where they are now and that what i whanna do and what they want me to do. my personality is nice. im a real nice person when you get to know me. i can have my bad moods at time, but other than that im a nice gurl. when i grow up or get old enough, i whanna be a chef , just like my uncle ben. he works at rock bottom and is the head chef. i love to cook. i whanna cook all kinds of food for people. my favorite food is itilian food. i whanna have my own resurant in paris. another thing i love to do is sing and dance. i love to sing ! i think i have a nice voice, but the thing is im scared to sing infront of people. but im not scared to sing infront of my mom or sister, because i know they wont laugh at me. some more things i love to do is read, write , go to school , hang out with my girl friends , have fun and color. lols, i know color. i dont care if people think im a little kid but i am a little kid. i still have time to grow up and be a adult, so i whanna be a kid as long as i can. adults have to do all this hard stuff, like pay bills , get a job , a house , car , and way more. i am a stronger little black girl, who knows what i want in life. i am my familys keeper. i am who i am.

A Perfect School ! i think what would make this school a better place is if they take us more serious and give us different kind of work, instead of the same thing over and over. this school needs to do alot of work around here.

30 years later. what i whanna do in my life is i whanna be a chef. i love to cook. when i cook it makes me happy. my favorite food is itilain food. i whanna have my own resturant in paris and serve itilain food. my uncle is the head chef at rock bottom resturant. he said if i keep my grades up, that he will buy my own pots and pans. i 30 years i can see myself married probably, kids , probably about 2 or 3. working, i will be done with college. i will just be living my life, with my husband , kids , family and friends. but until then, we will just have to wait and see.

SuperHero. During a school day, this teenage girl sat in the corner reading her book. when a group of girls came over and said " hey you, what that your reading " ? Then the girl ignored them then she asked again. " i said what you reading . She ignored her again, so then the girl snatched the book out of her hand and said this book is for retards . then she started ripping the pages out of the book and throwing them in her face . the teenage girl started to get mad , she felt her powers starting to come out of her . she had to remember she was in school and had to keep her identity hidden . so she just got up and walked away . the girls started calling her names and laughing as she continued to walk away . when the bell ringed for the students to go home , the teenage girl was waiting in the parkinglot in her car , when she seen the group of girls walking towards their pink punchbuggy , she started up her car . she followed the girls . 15 minuets later when the pink punchbuggy stopped infront of this big white and green house , she hurried up and got out of her car . so what was all that smack you was talking , the girls turned around and was in shock. what are you doing infront of my house ? was you following me retard, look yall the retard must have got lost. she said as she walked towards her. so as she contined to walk towards her the teenage girl swung at her and the girl flew back and she went flying hitting in cars and braking the street. the girls ran as fast as they can to their friend. she had blood cover all over her, luckily she was still alive .as the teenage girl walked towards them , the girls was scared. who are you, they said. as was standing tall and said " I AM MYSTICAL-GIRL !

As always Jada, I enjoy reading your writing. THe superhero story lacks some of the depth of your previous work in terms of character development. I am glad that they bully gets hit, but I don't feel that connected to Mystical Girl becuase I don't know much about her. Does she just want to beat people up? Or does she want to do something bigger like save all girls who are bullied? If you are not feeling the super hero thing, you can always roll with some more poetry. I like you start below and you could keep going with that. Think of using simile or metaphor... "A mother's tears are a river/ Strong and powerful/

Keep writing Jada, it is great to have you in class.

FreeStyle Friday ! Poem : a childs birth is so beautiful. a mothers tears is so sad. a fathers abuse is so bad.

Diary Of A Middle Schooler

Wilkinsburg High School ,The Worst School Ever To Go To. That School Is Wild ! If There Is A Fight, Teachers Wait Till The Fight Is Almost Over To Go Get Security.

Trayvon Martin im so tired of the trayvon martin situation. it is so sad that a 17 year old boy got killed for looking suspicous. all he had was skittles, and a arizona and hoodie on and so that gives him the right to shoot him. how is it that when black people have a hoodie's on they are a problem or something.

What Would Happen If You Mixed Lemonade With Orange Soda ? One Hot Day, Me And My Friends Wanted To Have A Picnic. So At 3:00 We All Met At Frick Park. It Was Me, Joi , Mariah , Kayla , Shelby , Damion , Othello , Tracey , And Deshawn. We Had Hotdogs, Hamburgers , Chicken , Ribs , Cookies , Donuts , We Just Had Alot Of Food. When The Food Was Done Everybody Was Eating Like They Never Ate Before. We Was Getting 3 And 4 Plates Of Food. After We Had Ate The Girls Went To The Store And Brought Some Water Guns And Balloons. When We Came Back The Boys Was Playing Football. We Started Acting Like Nothing Was Gonna Happen But The Boys Started Running Away So We Chased Then And Was Throwing Ballnoons And Shooting Then With The Gun. So The Boys Went To Go Get The Water Bottles, So Damion Grabbed Joi And Othello Was Pooring Water All Over Her. Everybody Got Tired, So We Sat Down And Got Something To Drink. Damion Took And Orange Soda And Poored It In Kayla's Lemonade. She Didnt Know She Drunk It. I Screamed He Put Orange Soda In Your Lemonade, So She Was Chasing Him Around.

I Want To Make Alot Of Changes In My Life. The First Chage I Want To Make Is Talking Back To Adults. When Ever

Wiz Khalifa, A School Assembly , And A Bully. On Friday During 4th Period, Ms.Polk Said IA Fancy Resturant I Saw Two Couples. They Look Like The Had Just Met. I Was Sitting Across The Room From Them, Watching Them. The Lady Was Laughing And So Was He. When Like 3 Hours Passed, They Had Left. I Was Thinking To Myself, They Look Like They Can Be A Perfect Couple. Im Going To Give Them A Couple More Weeks, Then Im Going To Make Them In Love. So The Next Day I Followed Both Couples, Seeing What They Both Like , What They Both Had In Common And What They Didnt. So After About A Week, They Started Hanging Out More. Like Going To The Movies, The Park , Having A Picnic. When About The Weeks Passed, The Went To Another Resturant. They Gave Each Other A Hug And Kiss. After About A Couple Hours, I Decided To Make It Happen. So I Got Up And Walked Passed The Male. Then I Went Back To My Seat To See What Was Going To Happen. The Male Looked Serious And Deep When He Was Talking To Her, The She Got Up And Gave Him A Big Hug , And A Long And Passion Kiss. I Knew Then That My Work Here Was Done.

Talent Show Time Rich Kidz : Why Us ( Remix ) Tired Waitin Up All Night And When We With Each Other I Just Kiss Not Fight Sometimes I Wonder Why This Had To Be Me All I Do Is Cry And You Cheat Or It Might Just Be Me  Man, Why Me  Man Why Me Ohhh....  You Cant Even Go A Day With Out Cheating Every Time We Fight Turns Into You Packing And Leaving Our Love Is Suppose To Be Strong But All You Do Is Cheat And You Know You Is Wrong I Am Strong Yes I Know So If You Wanna Leave Go A Head And Go... I Need You But I Really Dont I Dont Know What To Do Man Ohh.... Tired Waitin Up All Night And When We With Each Other I Just Wanna Kiss Not Fight Sometimes I Wonder Why This Had To Be Me All I Do Is Cry And You Cheat Or It Might Just Be Me  Man, Why Me  Man Why Me....  C H E A T  Dat All You Do Is Cheat , I Seen You With Her Last Night Your Phone Went Dead Naw You Turned It Off You Promised To God, You Wasnt Gonna Cheat All We Do Is Argue ' Fuse ' And Fight You Say Dont Listen To My Friends, She Was Drunk That Night I Wonder What It Is When You Lie, I Cry I Just Cry And Cry Tired Waitin Up All Night And When We With Each I just Wanna Kiss Not Fight Sometimes I Wonder Why This Had To Be Me All I Do Is Cry And Cheat Or It Might Just Be Me  Man, Why Me  Man Why Me Ohh....  You Said You Wont Cheat Ill Give You A Chance, But If You Cheat Again All I Knew Is Im So... Done With You